{"id":2532,"title":"Solution 2 - Total Value Of Exports From 2000 To 2005","advertisement_flag":false,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eThe graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eSummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/79-1-ielts-writing-sample-task-1-graph-total-value-exports\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 1\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/79-2-ielts-writing-sample-task-1-graph-total-value-exports\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 2\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-05-15T00:08:08.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":["ielts-writing-part-1|IELTS Writing Part 1|false","ielts-writing-part-1-academic|IELTS Writing Part 1 Academic|false","ielts-writing|IELTS Writing|false","ielts-academic-writing|IELTS Academic Writing|false"],"author_id":1,"slug":"79-2-ielts-writing-sample-task-1-graph-total-value-exports","parent_id":null,"visits":1384,"likes":3,"image":"/rails/active_storage/representations/eyJfcmFpbHMiOnsibWVzc2FnZSI6IkJBaHBBcWtDIiwiZXhwIjpudWxsLCJwdXIiOiJibG9iX2lkIn19--ec0a9def04de33484816ebc31557caa10adb86ae/eyJfcmFpbHMiOnsibWVzc2FnZSI6IkJBaDdCam9MY21WemFYcGxTU0lOTVRFd01IZzJNakVHT2daRlZBPT0iLCJleHAiOm51bGwsInB1ciI6InZhcmlhdGlvbiJ9fQ==--03073c48c81b618581157c4a4bd8e0bb47be452b/ielts-writing-task-1-total-value-export-fuel-food.png"}
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The two graphs provide information about the value of exports of a country in the period between years 2000 and 2005.
The first graph shows the total value the country exported, whereas the second graph covers fuel, food and manufactured goods. It can be seen that the total value was shrinking from 2000 to 2002. In 2002, the numbers changed rapidly and the total export value started to grow. The most remarkable point of the graph is the year 2005, because in that year the country exported more than twice the value it exported in 2000. Other facts worth noticing are the amounts of selected good that were exported. We can see that the value of exported food was very stable from 2000 to 2005 - approximately 4 000 million of dollars. The country exported the greatest value of fuel in 2000 and then the numbers were falling steadily until 2005. The value of exported manufactured goods was rising from 2000 to 2002, then falling and then rising again from 2003 to 2005.
You were able to achieve the task by describing the trends shown in the 2 graphs.
+LEXICAL RESOURCE
Vocabulary is very good and used properly.
+COHERENCE AND COHESION
Paragraphs are clearly organised.
+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
Compare to the original writing.
PERSONAL ADVICE:
You can remove the comma in this sentence: "The most remarkable point ... 2005, because in that year". For example: "He failed the subject because he was too lazy"
If you can just add a short summary your essay would be really great.
