{"id":2506,"title":"Solution 1 - Tourist Accommodation","advertisement_flag":false,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eYou are a tourist and have settled into the hotel. Although your room was booked in advance through a travel agency, you discover that there is no balcony, the entrance is under the staircase and the window opens on to the road. Write a letter to the travel agency manager asking her/him for a refund of the cost of the accommodation. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/75-1-ielts-writing-sample-task-1-letter-tourist-settled-hotel\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 1\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-04-19T12:50:14.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":["ielts-writing-part-1|IELTS Writing Part 1|false","ielts-writing-part-1-general|IELTS Writing Part 1 General|false","ielts-writing|IELTS Writing|false"],"author_id":1,"slug":"75-1-ielts-writing-sample-task-1-letter-tourist-settled-hotel","parent_id":null,"visits":710,"likes":2,"image":null}
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[{"id":2507,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eDear Sir, \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eI am Ravi Kumar Nadipalli. I have checked in to the Hotel Holiday Inn in Munnar since yesterday's night. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction about the hotel room that is booked for my stay. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eI have booked the room through your travel agency two months back which is well in advance. Disappointedly, I found that the booked room is not having balcony whereas I expected to have a panoramic view from balcony. The entrance of the room is under the staircase which is not comfortable for us as height of the staircase is low and we have to bend while moving in and out of the room. And lastly the only one window in the room opens on to the road which brings in dust and sound pollution. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eI am not satisfied with the room and it is very disappointing. I came here with my family to take rest from my day to day work and to leisure for some days in this Hill station. Please try to understand the problem and provide me another room in this hotel or in some other hotel which is good and satisfying the above said conditions. If you are not able to provide me one, please refund me the cost of the accommodation as it didn’t solve the purpose. I appreciate your immediate attention to this matter and resolve it as soon as possible. Please do not hesitate to contact me on my mobile no. 1234562566 for any additional information. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eI look forward to hear from you soon. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eYours Sincerely, \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eRavi Kumar Nadipalli\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-04-19T12:50:14.000Z","author_name":"numravi","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2506,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2508,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003e\u003cb\u003e\u003ci\u003eCritique\u003c/i\u003e\u003c/b\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+TASK ACHIEVEMENT\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eYou were able to achieve the task and fulfill all the requirements.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+LEXICAL RESOURCE\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eVocabulary is strong and flexible.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+COHERENCE AND COHESION\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eParagraphs are organised. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eNeed to pay more attention to grammar. Please compare this with the original writing.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003ePERSONAL ADVICE: \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cul\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eSince you used \"I have checked\", you shouldn't have used \"yesterday night\" like that. Rather you can write \"I have checked ... since yesterday night\".\u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003e\"yesterday night\" -\u0026gt; \"yesterday's night\"\u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eYou shouldn't use \"But\" with only one clause: \"But I found that the booked ...\". You should consider using other words/phrases such as \"However\". For example: \"I tried my best to fix my laptop yesterday \u003cb\u003ebut\u003c/b\u003e it's still not working\" (2 clauses here).\u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003e\"I look forward to hear\" -\u0026gt; \"I look forward to hearing\"\u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003c/ul\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-04-19T16:47:53.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2506,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2509,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eWriting Tips:\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-can-i-improve-my-writing-skills\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow To Improve Writing Skills\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/what-required-ielts-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eWhat Is Required In IELTS Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/tips-ielts-vocabulary-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eTips On IELTS Vocabulary For Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-your-ielts-essays-are-graded\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow Your IELTS Essays Are Graded\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-04-19T17:47:50.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2506,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null}]
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You are a tourist and have settled into the hotel. Although your room was booked in advance through a travel agency, you discover that there is no balcony, the entrance is under the staircase and the window opens on to the road. Write a letter to the travel agency manager asking her/him for a refund of the cost of the accommodation.
I am Ravi Kumar Nadipalli. I have checked in to the Hotel Holiday Inn in Munnar since yesterday's night. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction about the hotel room that is booked for my stay.
I have booked the room through your travel agency two months back which is well in advance. Disappointedly, I found that the booked room is not having balcony whereas I expected to have a panoramic view from balcony. The entrance of the room is under the staircase which is not comfortable for us as height of the staircase is low and we have to bend while moving in and out of the room. And lastly the only one window in the room opens on to the road which brings in dust and sound pollution.
I am not satisfied with the room and it is very disappointing. I came here with my family to take rest from my day to day work and to leisure for some days in this Hill station. Please try to understand the problem and provide me another room in this hotel or in some other hotel which is good and satisfying the above said conditions. If you are not able to provide me one, please refund me the cost of the accommodation as it didn’t solve the purpose. I appreciate your immediate attention to this matter and resolve it as soon as possible. Please do not hesitate to contact me on my mobile no. 1234562566 for any additional information.
I look forward to hear from you soon.
Yours Sincerely,
Ravi Kumar Nadipalli
Bob - 20/04/2012 02:47:53
Critique
+TASK ACHIEVEMENT
You were able to achieve the task and fulfill all the requirements.
+LEXICAL RESOURCE
Vocabulary is strong and flexible.
+COHERENCE AND COHESION
Paragraphs are organised.
+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
Need to pay more attention to grammar. Please compare this with the original writing.
PERSONAL ADVICE:
Since you used "I have checked", you shouldn't have used "yesterday night" like that. Rather you can write "I have checked ... since yesterday night".
"yesterday night" -> "yesterday's night"
You shouldn't use "But" with only one clause: "But I found that the booked ...". You should consider using other words/phrases such as "However". For example: "I tried my best to fix my laptop yesterday but it's still not working" (2 clauses here).
"I look forward to hear" -> "I look forward to hearing"
