{"id":2084,"title":"Solution 1 - Single or Multiple Careers And The Importance of Further Education","advertisement_flag":false,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003ePresent a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eThe idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eUse your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your examples and relevant evidence. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/4-1-single-or-multiple-careers-and-the-importance-of-further-education\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 1\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2011-07-31T13:51:39.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":["ielts-writing-part-2|IELTS Writing Part 2|false","ielts-writing-opinion|IELTS Writing Opinion|false","ielts-writing|IELTS Writing|false","ielts-academic-writing|IELTS Academic Writing|false"],"author_id":1,"slug":"4-1-single-or-multiple-careers-and-the-importance-of-further-education","parent_id":null,"visits":2938,"likes":3,"image":null}
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Therefore, s/he needs to constantly improve his or her skills.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eSecondly, it is very popular for a person to work in different companies. Maintaining profit is always a concern for businesses. One of the many methods is to keep employees on a casual basis so that unnecessary expenditure can be reduced. Hence, it leads to a need for employees to work in multiple companies at the same time, thereby resulting in the requirement for them to adapt to different jobs.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eFinally, further education can also be a good opportunity for job seekers to gain competitive advantages. For example, considering two candidates, who gets a higher education will have more chance to get employed. The reason is employers are seemingly interested in not just what an employee can do but also his potentials. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eIn conclusion, having multiple careers is more advantageous and to obtain that, one must constantly study during his life. This trend is becoming more and more popular for three reasons. The first reason is it supports the sustainability of businesses by allowing employees to have more than one role in a company. Next, working in two companies or even more is required for many people. Last but not least, further education helps job seekers to have more advantages.\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2011-07-31T13:51:39.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2084,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2087,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eWriting Tips:\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-can-i-improve-my-writing-skills\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow To Improve Writing Skills\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/what-required-ielts-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eWhat Is Required In IELTS Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/tips-ielts-vocabulary-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eTips On IELTS Vocabulary For Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-your-ielts-essays-are-graded\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow Your IELTS Essays Are Graded\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2011-07-31T14:42:51.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2084,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2086,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003e\u003cb\u003e\u003ci\u003eOutline\u003c/i\u003e\u003c/b\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eArgument: Yes, a person should equip himself with multiple skills by constantly studying throughout his life.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cblockquote\u003e\n\u003cp\u003eOne person can have multiple roles in one company\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eOne person can work for different companies\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003ePromotion\u003c/p\u003e\n\u003c/blockquote\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eFurther education should be supported to help\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cblockquote\u003e\n\u003cp\u003eHaving multiple skills\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eMore knowledgeable\u003c/p\u003e\n\u003c/blockquote\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003cb\u003e\u003ci\u003eCritique\u003c/i\u003e\u003c/b\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+TASK ACHIEVEMENT\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eYou were able to achieve the task by showing your viewpoint about whether a person should have multiple skills and constant studying is required or not.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+LEXICAL RESOURCE\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eVocabulary is varied: employee, expenditure, businesses, result in, lead to, last but not least. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+COHERENCE AND COHESION\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eThere are a number of transition words used: firstly, secondly, finally, in conclusion, next, hence, thereby, therefore.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eThe organization is clear and logical. There are \u003cb\u003e5 paragraphs\u003c/b\u003e totally which is very good because it ensures you have enough time and still be able to express your ideas.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eNo grammar errors noted. However, there are some changes which can improve the essay:\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cblockquote\u003e\n\u003cp\u003eIn the introduction, change \"\u003cb\u003ebusiness is\u003c/b\u003e becoming more and more demanding\" to \"\u003cb\u003ebusinesses are\u003c/b\u003e becoming more and more demanding\" because the word \"businesses\" here refers to \"companies\"\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eIn the 3rd paragraph, change \"it is very popular for a person to work in different companies\" to \"it is very popular for a person to work in different companies \u003cb\u003eat the same time\u003c/b\u003e\"\u003c/p\u003e\n\u003c/blockquote\u003e\n","created_at":"2011-07-31T14:48:26.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2084,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null}]
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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:
The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your examples and relevant evidence.
Business is becoming more and more demanding. Therefore, a diverse skill set seems to be a must for a company to sustain its operation. However, some people are still wondering if a single career is better than several careers. I’m going to prove that a person should equip himself with different skills and further education is of necessity throughout his life.
Firstly, every employee now is supposed to deal with multiple positions in a company. As can be seen, small to medium-sized companies are becoming very popular. This is very different from the past when a company tended to have a really large structure in which each employee was responsible for a specified set of related jobs. In other words, an employee today tends to have various responsibilities. Therefore, s/he needs to constantly improve his or her skills.
Secondly, it is very popular for a person to work in different companies. Maintaining profit is always a concern for businesses. One of the many methods is to keep employees on a casual basis so that unnecessary expenditure can be reduced. Hence, it leads to a need for employees to work in multiple companies at the same time, thereby resulting in the requirement for them to adapt to different jobs.
Finally, further education can also be a good opportunity for job seekers to gain competitive advantages. For example, considering two candidates, who gets a higher education will have more chance to get employed. The reason is employers are seemingly interested in not just what an employee can do but also his potentials.
In conclusion, having multiple careers is more advantageous and to obtain that, one must constantly study during his life. This trend is becoming more and more popular for three reasons. The first reason is it supports the sustainability of businesses by allowing employees to have more than one role in a company. Next, working in two companies or even more is required for many people. Last but not least, further education helps job seekers to have more advantages.
Argument: Yes, a person should equip himself with multiple skills by constantly studying throughout his life.
One person can have multiple roles in one company
One person can work for different companies
Promotion
Further education should be supported to help
Having multiple skills
More knowledgeable
Critique
+TASK ACHIEVEMENT
You were able to achieve the task by showing your viewpoint about whether a person should have multiple skills and constant studying is required or not.
+LEXICAL RESOURCE
Vocabulary is varied: employee, expenditure, businesses, result in, lead to, last but not least.
+COHERENCE AND COHESION
There are a number of transition words used: firstly, secondly, finally, in conclusion, next, hence, thereby, therefore.
The organization is clear and logical. There are 5 paragraphs totally which is very good because it ensures you have enough time and still be able to express your ideas.
+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
No grammar errors noted. However, there are some changes which can improve the essay:
In the introduction, change "business is becoming more and more demanding" to "businesses are becoming more and more demanding" because the word "businesses" here refers to "companies"
In the 3rd paragraph, change "it is very popular for a person to work in different companies" to "it is very popular for a person to work in different companies at the same time"
