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{"id":2342,"title":"Solution 1 - People Character - Genetics Or Environment","advertisement_flag":false,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003ePeople’s character is influenced by environment rather than genetics. Do you agree or disagree?\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/49-1-ielts-writing-task-2-people-character-environment-genetics\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 1\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/49-2-ielts-writing-task-2-people-character-environment-genetics\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 2\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-01-23T05:53:37.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":["ielts-writing-part-2|IELTS Writing Part 2|false","ielts-writing-agree-or-disagree|IELTS Writing Agree Or Disagree|false","ielts-writing|IELTS Writing|false","ielts-academic-writing|IELTS Academic Writing|false"],"author_id":1,"slug":"49-1-ielts-writing-task-2-people-character-environment-genetics","parent_id":null,"visits":3734,"likes":7,"image":null}
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[{"id":2343,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eNumerous  scientists claim that both genes and the environment play a significant role in shaping one's character. Research conducted by leading scientific institutions has shown that while some character traits are inherited, most are acquired through experience during lifetime.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eLet us consider cases which clearly demonstrate strong links between the environment and a person's character.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eEveryone has their own unique DNA, except for identical twins, who share the same DNA. Many studies have been done involving hundreds pairs of identical twins who were raised apart, in very different environments. These observations showed  that twins really do share some traits such as a  preference for the same colors or smells, books and films. However, their essential characters are quite differ from each other. As explained by most psychologists, it was a result of the influence from their environments. For example, one of the twins was brought up in the countryside, and the other was in the city.  The rural twin is unflappable, taciturn, withdrawn, and  hard working. The urban twin is quite the opposite. He may be described as  talkative, open and temperamental.  \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eThat's why there is no doubt that the influence of the environment and nurture is more obvious and convincing than genes. For example, parents try to rent or buy  homes in wholesome areas far from crime-ridden ones in  the hope that their children will not be amid bad influences. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eBy and large,  people are profoundly influenced by  their  parents, co-workers, friends, teachers, peers as well as media. These are important factors of life that have a great influence on one's nature. Moreover, they  may be responsible for forming the  characters of those who communicate with them in everyday life. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eAll these arguments lead to the conclusion that the environment contributes more to shaping an individual's nature than genes. Indeed, the influence of nurture on one's past is so overwhelming and powerful. That is why criminologists state  that criminals are often the result of bad parenting or bad nurturing.\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-01-23T05:53:37.000Z","author_name":"milaniyamiila","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2342,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2344,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003e\u003cb\u003e\u003ci\u003eCritique\u003c/i\u003e\u003c/b\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+TASK ACHIEVEMENT\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eYou were able to achieve the task by showing your opinion as to whether you agree or disagree with the statement in the essay's requirement.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+LEXICAL RESOURCE\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eVocabulary is very good: wholesome, by and large, unflappable, taciturn, withdrawn, criminologists.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+COHERENCE AND COHESION\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eParagraphs are not strongly distintive. Good use of transition words: however, by and large, indeed.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eCompare to the original writing.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003ePERSONAL ADVICE\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+Your essay is well beyond 250 words (339 words) which is not really good because you have to consider spending time on the first task.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+Your essay was well written. However, each paragraph doesn't have its own idea. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eFor example, let's consider the second paragraph. It has shown that even though genes really affect one's character, the environment plays a more important role in his essential nature.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eThe 3rd paragraph simply continues the idea of the previous one by confirming the strong influence of the environment and nurture.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eTherefore, it's not really reasonable to split them into 2 different paragraphs.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+Which one are you refering to in \"Let us consider cases which clearly demonstrate the strong link\"? You should change to \"strong links\".\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+Missing \"that\" in \"These are important factors of  life have a profound\".\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+In the 4th paragraph, you shouldn't use \"profound\" repeatedly.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+Punctuation: \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cblockquote\u003e\n\u003cp\u003e\"scientific institutions has shown that, while some character traits\"\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\"That's why, there is no doubt\"\u003c/p\u003e\n\u003c/blockquote\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+Wrong \"is quite differ from\". You should say \"is quite different from\" or \"differs from\"\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"do really share\" is not really what you meant. It should be \"really do share\"\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+The way you used \"At the same time\" in your essay was not really appropriate.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"most psychologists  explained it \u003cb\u003eby\u003c/b\u003e\" is not suitable.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"and\" is usually used to connect 2 similar ideas. Therefore, \"their essential characters ... and most psychologists explained it ...\" should be re-considered.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+You are very good at using idioms. However, in academic writing, you should avoid such phrases as \" and a little bit of a couch potato\".\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-01-23T06:44:48.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2342,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2345,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eWriting Tips:\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-can-i-improve-my-writing-skills\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow To Improve Writing Skills\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/what-required-ielts-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eWhat Is Required In IELTS Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/tips-ielts-vocabulary-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eTips On IELTS Vocabulary For Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-your-ielts-essays-are-graded\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow Your IELTS Essays Are Graded\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-01-23T07:53:13.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2342,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null}]
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