{"id":2471,"title":"Solution 1 - High Sales of Popular Consumer Goods","advertisement_flag":false,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eToday, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent you agree or disagree? \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/71-1-ielts-writing-sample-task-2-today-high-sales-consumer-goods\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 1\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/71-2-ielts-writing-sample-task-2-today-high-sales-consumer-goods\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 2\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/71-3-ielts-writing-sample-task-2-today-high-sales-consumer-goods\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 3\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-03-24T01:03:01.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":["ielts-writing-part-2|IELTS Writing Part 2|false","ielts-writing-agree-or-disagree|IELTS Writing Agree Or Disagree|false","ielts-writing|IELTS Writing|false","ielts-academic-writing|IELTS Academic Writing|false"],"author_id":1,"slug":"71-1-ielts-writing-sample-task-2-today-high-sales-consumer-goods","parent_id":null,"visits":2321,"likes":0,"image":null}

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[{"id":2472,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eToday, it is a world of consumerism. Advertisements have always played a key role to boost up the sales of popular consumer products. However, innovative and attractive advertisements on mass-media often happen to entice people to buy unnecessary and lavish products which can leave a bad impact on people’s economic life.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eTo draw an example of how advertising influences people’s way of thinking one may look at advertisements made by manufacturers of lavish cars. These cars are very expensive to buy and cannot be afforded by most people in the society; nevertheless, they are still sold well due to attractive advertisements on radio and television which often involve the voice or appearance of famous movie stars. This kind of practice is also true for other consumer products such as LCD TV, soaps, mobile phones. As a result, people fail to accumulate any savings from their earnings as they simply spend too much on buying consumer goods. The high rate of consumptions may enlarge the distance between the rich and the poor of a society which may cause detriment for the overall economy in the long run. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eFrom the above analysis, even though the consumer goods manufacturers have rights to advertise their products , there should be rules and regulations enacted by the government so that no one can mindlessly influence general people to buy unnecessary consumer products. \u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-03-24T01:03:01.000Z","author_name":"stopwatch","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2471,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2473,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003e\u003cb\u003e\u003ci\u003eCritique\u003c/i\u003e\u003c/b\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+TASK ACHIEVEMENT\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eYou were able to achieve the task by showing your own opinions and to what extent you agree and disagree.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+LEXICAL RESOURCE\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eVocabulary is not rich enough and sometimes used wrongly.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+COHERENCE AND COHESION\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eParagraphs are clearly organised. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eCompare to the original writing.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003ePERSONAL ADVICE: \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cul\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003e\"unnecessary lavish products\" -\u0026gt; \"unnecessary and lavish products\"\u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eVerb: \"how advertising \u003cb\u003einfluence\u003c/b\u003e people’s way of thinking\" -\u0026gt; \"how advertising \u003cb\u003einfluences\u003c/b\u003e people’s way of thinking\"\u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eFirstly, you shouldn't use contraction. Secondly, you should be cautious with the way you are using \"the\": \"the ads made by the manufacturers\" -\u0026gt; which ads? which manufacturers?\u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eYou should use comma when you use \"As\" at the beginning. For example: As it was raining heavily, we couldn't go to school. \u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eYou should re-consider how to use \"nevertheless\". It's used to link 2 clauses and used when showing surprising details. For example: \u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003c/ul\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eTom has been living in China for 10 years; nevertheless, he couldn't speak any Chinese. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cblockquote\u003e\n\u003cp\u003eIn the example, you can see \"nevertheless\" is used in the 2nd clause where we were showing surprising details. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eHaving explained that, I also want to recommend you that you shouldn't use \"anyway\" where you have already used \"nevertheless\". \u003c/p\u003e\n\u003c/blockquote\u003e\n\n\u003cul\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eTry not to use \"so on\". It's not considered formal in writing. When you use \"such as\", other recipients know there are more things. \u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003e\"expend\" was incorrect in the context you were using it. \u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003ePunctuation: \u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003c/ul\u003e\n\n\u003cblockquote\u003e\n\u003cp\u003e\"As a result\" -\u0026gt; \"As a result,\" \u003c/p\u003e\n\u003c/blockquote\u003e\n\n\u003cul\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003e\"detrimental\" is adjective. You can't use like that. You should have used \"detriment\". \u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eYou should clearly state your side whether you agree or disagree. We can see that you agree with the statement \"the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold\". However, it was not clearly stated in your essay. \u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003e\"Analysing the above discussion\" is not a right way to express your idea -\u0026gt; \"From the above analysis\". \u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003cli\u003e\u003cp\u003eFrom our experience, you'd better organise your essay in such a way that there should be 1 introduction, 3 body paragraphs, and 1 conclusion.\u003c/p\u003e\u003c/li\u003e\n\u003c/ul\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-03-24T03:40:51.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2471,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2474,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eWriting Tips:\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-can-i-improve-my-writing-skills\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow To Improve Writing Skills\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/what-required-ielts-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eWhat Is Required In IELTS Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/tips-ielts-vocabulary-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eTips On IELTS Vocabulary For Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-your-ielts-essays-are-graded\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow Your IELTS Essays Are Graded\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-03-24T04:02:02.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2471,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null}]

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