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IELTS Writing Sample

School Problems With Student Behavior

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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. what do you think are the causes of this? what solutions can you suggest?

How many words? How long?

One Possible Solution: (Nothing is perfect! Please take this as an example only!)

This resource has been reviewed. However, there are many mistakes. Please check the critique so that you can become aware of these common errors! Half of the mistakes have been fixed and the rest is given to you as an exercise. You are encouraged to comment and report other mistakes because they are normally repeated in the essay. Doing this gives you a better understanding of how to improve your writing skills.

Negative student behavior in school environment has become alarmingly high about which many people are concerned. School managers mention the steady growth of these trends will damage the education system. I believe that you can find the reasons of this disorder in our educational environments and non-qualified teachers.

It is strongly proved that the atmosphere has a significant effect on human reactions. Low air quality standards, lacking of air conditioning, insufficient space for playing, crowded environments are some examples that scientists have proven to be linked to students behavior. The reason is that students are young and energetic so they need to have more outdoor activities. Governments should modify school standards and allocate more subsidies to school managers to reorganize the facilities and space and also to change the shape of our educational area from an office to a calm place for our students.

Besides that, most of our teachers and school managers are not qualified personnel. Statistics show that just three out of twenty five teachers in my country have passed mental related courses and are familiar with some basic needs of students and youngsters. The results attributed to our school managers is worst by just three persons out of a hundred which indicates that there is a strong demand for using of psychologists and educational consultants to plan a appropriate program.

This writing is found under the following category(ies):
IELTS Opinion Essays  
Critique
This critique is meant for the writing from amirameri83. This writing task has been reviewed and partially corrected. Please revert to the original IELTS writing before correction to understand this critique!

+TASK ACHIEVEMENT
You were not able to achieve the task. You are supposed to pinpoint the causes and to suggest your solutions. However, you mentioned only the causes but not the solutions.
+LEXICAL RESOURCE
Vocabulary is weak and you need to put more effort into improving it. There were many words/phrases you used incorrectly.

+COHERENCE AND COHESION
Paragraphs are poorly organised.

+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
Compare to the original writing.

PERSONAL ADVICE:
+ "effective point" is not what you meant. Effective is to be successful in producing a desired or intended result.
+ Student behaviour is the main problem not "Complaining about students' reactions". It's wrong to write "Complaining about students' reactions in school environment becomes ...".
+ "Behavior" is different from "reactions". "Reaction" is how you respond to an event.
+ Plural: "the steady growth of these trend" -> "the steady growth of these trends".
+ Wrong "a significant effects": you used "a" but "effects" is in plural form.
+ "inadequate space" -> "insufficient space". Try to understand the difference between them. It can somhow improve your level of English. Otherwise, you can post a question below.
+ You shouldn't use "so on" in your essay. The sentence you used it already meant there were more things like that.
+ "young and fresh" -> it sounds like "fresh meat" ???
+ "Since students are young": when you use "since", there must be 2 clauses.
+ "modify" is not a correct word to use in that context.
+ "The other effective point": did you mention it before?
+ "experted"??? It's not a correct word.



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IELTS Writing Sample

Mandatory Financial Education

IELTS Writing Sample - Task 2

Financial education should be mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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IELTS Writing Word Count and IELTS Writing Time

IELTS Writing Task 1:
Timing: 20 minutes
Minimum word count: 150

IELTS Writing Task 2:
Timing: 40 minutes
Minimum word count: 250

IELTS Writing Sample - Task 1

There are 2 different formats. One is for the Academic module and the other is for the General module. However, for both modules, you will have to produce a writing of 150 words based on the given information.
IELTS Writing Task 1 - General Module
You are supposed to write a letter.
IELTS Writing Task 1 - Academic Module
You will be given a task based on some pictorial or graphic information. You have to describe the information provided.
For More Details: IELTS Writing Task 1

IELTS Writing Sample - Task 2

This task is more difficult than IELTS Writing Task 1
You have to write at least 250 words and, as Task 2 is longer than Task 1, you are advised to spend approximately 40 minutes on this task and 20 minutes on the first task.
You are expected to produce a writing on a given topic and to organise your answer correctly, giving some examples to support your ideas.
For More Details: IELTS Writing Task 2

Give your writing a good structure

1) Introduction is a must. You don't believe you could get a good grade without introduction, do you?

2) Body: 3 paragraphs are also necessary. Three is a magical number. It can do wonders to your overall band score.

3) Conclusion. You do not want to infuse your examiner with a feeling of incompleteness.

A Good Outline before you write is essential

What you are going to write in your essay? Write down the key ideas as short as possible.

An outline sample
Introduction - Topic and opinion in short
Paragraph 1 - staff working conditions are important
Paragraph 2 - employers should research and improve the working conditions
Paragraph 3 - concentrating more on their product is bad
Conclusion - Short summary of paragraphs

How will your essay look like?

Is it everything?

No, the structure you have just seen is a structure for an opinion essay.

What does it mean?

It means there are many different types of essays. If you go through our website, you can see that under IELTS Writing Task 1 and Task 2, there are different categories.
You need to go through each of them and study the structure for the particular writing type.

I do know the structure of an IELTS Writing but why I didn't score high in the exam?

There are many reasons. One of the many reasons is lacking of linking words.
Did you use linking words?
They would make your structure clearer and therefore improve your overal score.

Linking Words or Transitional Words

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This is how your essay is graded

There are 4 components: Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resource, Grammatical Range and Accuracy.

Task Response means to what extend your essay covers the topic. For example, if the topic is "The advantages and disadvantages of globalization", you would have to write about both aspects not just only advantages or just only disadvantages.

Coherence and Cohesion means how well your paragraphs and sentences are connected. If your first paragraph is about advantages of globalisation, you should start your second paragraph with phrases such as "Despite the advantages, there are many disadvantages we should be aware of". Otherwise, your essay is just a list of items which are not related to each other.

Lexical Resource means vocabulary and different types of sentences, simple and complex. You should be able to demonstrate your capability in using English.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy means spelling and grammar of sentences. You should be able to spell the words correctly, do not forget articles “a” and “the”, punctuations is also important.

One more important thing to know: the four criteria are equally weighted. It means that if you forgot about “Coherence and Cohesion” in your essay, you will loose 1/4 of your essay points.