Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support you choice.
One of the most controversial issues today relates to whether working in a large or a small company is a better option. From my everyday experience and observation, I believe that a large corporation offers more opportunities to their employees than a small one. In this essay, I will give some examples to support my opinion.
Firstly, the main reason for believing this is that it provides more opportunities for development such as having international travels, and education. For instance, one of the most well-known Hungarian multinational companies offered their employees a free language course to increase their level of English. Moreover, acquiring new knowledge is beneficial not only for the employees, but also for the firm in general. In order to accomplish that, companies obviously have to give professional training to skilled workers who are competent enough to achieve success in both the national and international markets. From this point of view, working for a large corporation seems to be more advantageous.
Secondly, there is no doubt that spending valuable years at a well-known firm can be a huge benefit in the labour market if one decides to apply for another job. For example, employers generally favor applicants with strong references and experience over those who worked for small unknown businesses and participated in only small-scale projects . In fact, those who are working in a large-scale project, having the opportunity to be in a remarkable team and contributing to significant projects will have more respects in the labour market. Thus, it must be acknowledged that working for a multinational corporation or just a large national company is a huge advantage.
In conclusion, the mentioned reasons and examples have clearly shown that large firms undoubtedly provide their employees with more opportunities either from the view of development or from the view of labor market.
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You were able to achieve the task by giving your choice and the evidence to support your opinion.
Vocabulary is good: remarkable, multinational, labor market.
+COHERENCE AND COHESION
Paragraphs are clear, logical and organized. Good use of transition words: for example, for instance, moreover.
+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
Compare to the original writing.
+Pay more attention to the balance in using "more...than..."
+wrong usage of "companion"
+Inappropriate: "In this essay, I will give some examples to support my opinion". The essay asks you to give reasons and details not only examples.
+Try not to use "and so on". In academic writing, people tend to pay attention to realistic and solid facts.
+The way you used "the whole firm" in that context is a little bit strange to me.
+It's more academic to say "spending valuable years" than to say "spending some years".
+Pay more attention to punctuation "it must be ... a large national company, is a huge advantage"
+"In fact, those who are working in a large-scale project, having the opportunity to be in a remarkable team and contributing to significant projects, which will have more respect in the labour market"
+Pay attention to this "either from ... or from
+Plural "the national and international market" -> "the national and international markets"