What are some important qualities of a good supervisor(boss)? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important.
Nowadays many people work under supervision of someone else in private or state organizations. There are many important qualities that are required to become good managers. Some of these important qualities of a supervisor are his behaviors towards employees and also the ability of taking care of and motivating staff.
Supervisors are people like anyone of us and that is why they have positive and negative parts in their characters. Supervisors are responsible for the well organized and productive work of their employees. That is the reason that supervisors have to own some qualities, which make them good managers.
One of the most important qualities of a good supervisor is patience. A supervisor has to be patient to his/her employees. This quality is very essential for everyone who wants to be a good supervisor. Human being is not perfect and therefore making mistakes is unavoidable. Because of this reason, a supervisor has to be patient in order to teach and train others about the important things about the specific of the job.
Other important qualities of a good supervisor are his/her tolerance, kindness and respect. A good manager has to encourage workers. He/she has to motivate employees by bonuses and increasing salaries. A good supervisor has to care about people, should believe them and pay attention to their feelings and know how to teach them. He has to be honest and willing to accept his own mistakes and tolerate with others' mistakes. A good manager not only has to be patient, but also has to trust workers so that they can become productive.
In conclusion, there are many qualities that a good supervisor should possess. However, on top of all the qualities, a good manager has to care about people, who are working under his/her supervision and to know how to encourage and motivate them.
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+COHERENCE AND COHESION
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>"In order to be a better profesionalist ,there" -> "profesionalist, there".
After comma, you need to put a space not before it.
>No need to put comma here "there are some important qualities, that make".
>You need to put a comma after "In conclusion".
+Wrong "profesionalist" -> "professional".
+The second paragraph actually belongs to the introduction. After the introduction, you should give your ideas on the topic not giving more explanations as such.
+Unclear expressing: "In order to be a better profesional, there are some important qualities that make people good managers."
>you mentioned "in order to be ..." so you mean if somebody wants to become like that. Hence, in the second phrase, you should say what the requirements are to become the thing you just mentioned.
>then in the second phrase, you were talking about another thing.
+Need to understand the difference between "anyone" and "everyone".
+"good-organized" -> "well organised".
+The word "bosses" is not academic.
+"The supervisor": which supervisor?
+You have to put more attention to using "a" and "the".
+In "has to be not only patient, but also to trust": you used "not only + adjective", so you also have to use "but also + adjective".
+"we may say that" is totally not academic.