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{"id":2438,"title":"Solution 1 - Should Children Compete or Cooperate","advertisement_flag":false,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eSome people think that children should learn to compete in the world, but others think the children should be taught to cooperate so as to become more useful to society. State your reasons from both sides and give your opinion.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/65-1-ielts-writing-sample-task-2-children-compete-cooperate\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eSolution 1\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-02-17T10:45:37.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":["ielts-writing-part-2|IELTS Writing Part 2|false","ielts-writing-discuss-and-give-opinion|IELTS Writing Discuss And Give Opinion|false","ielts-writing|IELTS Writing|false","ielts-academic-writing|IELTS Academic Writing|false"],"author_id":1,"slug":"65-1-ielts-writing-sample-task-2-children-compete-cooperate","parent_id":null,"visits":1379,"likes":5,"image":null}
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[{"id":2439,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eChildhood education is one of the hottest topics nowadays as people are becoming more aware of the importance of children's upbringing. Some people hold opinions that they should learn to be competitive enough to embrace their future life while others think they should have been gregarious. In this essay, I am going to discuss both sides.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eFirstly, people have been competing with each other consciously or unconsciously since they were born. For example, businessmen strive for more efficient ways of production to save cost and increase profits; students work diligently for more opportunities to get top grades or to be able to enter well-known universities; parents spur their children to be outstanding among their peers and every one of us is eager for success or a relatively good standard of living conditions. Moreover, in order to get a good job with high salary and social status, people have to become more competent. It is a common phenomenon that many applicants compete for one position in job markets. Hence, the lesson from the observation is that teaching people how to compete at a young age is of high importance.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eOn the other hand, children also need to cooperate with others. The society where we live is a huge family that contains everyone’s contribution. In other words, it is not a platform for a single person. Speaking of, for instance, filmmaking, money exchanging, products circulation and international trade, there is undoubtedly a need for a variety of people in order to make them run properly. Hence, children need to be taught how to share and cooperate with other people as they live in the family. Cooperation is also a way to make things easier and more effective with everyone’s participation and contribution. For example, management board in a company is usually made up by more than one person.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eIn conclusion, children should become more competitive and at the same time they need to learn how to cooperate with others as both sides will bring merits to them.\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-02-17T10:45:37.000Z","author_name":"maomao","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2438,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2441,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003eWriting Tips:\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-can-i-improve-my-writing-skills\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow To Improve Writing Skills\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/what-required-ielts-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eWhat Is Required In IELTS Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/tips-ielts-vocabulary-writing\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eTips On IELTS Vocabulary For Writing\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e\u003ca href=\"/d/how-your-ielts-essays-are-graded\" rel=\"nofollow\"\u003eHow Your IELTS Essays Are Graded\u003c/a\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-02-17T12:39:17.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2438,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null},{"id":2440,"title":null,"advertisement_flag":false,"author_id":1,"content":"\n\u003cp\u003e\u003cb\u003e\u003ci\u003eCritique\u003c/i\u003e\u003c/b\u003e\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+TASK ACHIEVEMENT\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eYou were able to achieve the task. There are 3 key requirements in this writing topic which have been fulfilled :\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cblockquote\u003e\n\u003cp\u003ewhy children should be taught to cooperate.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003ewhy children should be taught to compete.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eand what your opinions about this are.\u003c/p\u003e\n\u003c/blockquote\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+LEXICAL RESOURCE\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eVocabulary is good and you have demonstrated your ability in using a wide range of vocabulary.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+COHERENCE AND COHESION\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eParagraphs are clearly organised. \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eCompare to the original writing.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003ePERSONAL ADVICE: \u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+Since this is the second time you submitted your writing tasks for correction, we have noticed from the first writing task that you like to start your essay with \"How to ...\". There is nothing wrong with that but if you can change it to the way we have fixed for you, you could gain more marks.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"hold opinion\" -\u0026gt; \"hold opinions\".\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"give discussion\" -\u0026gt; \"give a discussion on something\".\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"workers strive for a large scale of production\": it's not the workers who aim for profit but the businessmen.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"a key university\": is it only one?\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+In this context, you should use \"Moreover\": \"Besides, to process a decent job\".\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"become + adj\"\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003eEx: She has become stronger since she started jogging.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+I believe you wanted to say \"possess\" here: \"to process a decent job so that\".\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+If you want to use this \"with globalization spread all over the world\", you should have written \"with globalization spreading all over the world\".\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+This sentence is not very clear \"many applicants compete for one position in job markets with globalization spread all over the world which indicates\": I couldn't see what the reason behind for the relationship between globalisation spreading ... with the fact that young people should study to compete is. You can just remove some details there as we corrected.\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"On the other sides\" -\u0026gt; \"On the other side\".\u003c/p\u003e\n\n\u003cp\u003e+\"Making films, money exchanging, products circulation and international trade all need varieties\": money exchanging is a process which has people involved.\u003c/p\u003e\n","created_at":"2012-02-17T14:33:43.000Z","author_name":"Bob","tag_groups":[],"slug":null,"parent_id":2438,"visits":0,"likes":-1,"image":null}]
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